[Request] Helpful Editors Wanted For a Short Story I'm Writing

I have been working on a short story for the past few months. It's based off of a prompt I wrote under a different username that I was never able to get out of my head. It is far from finished, but I'm excited with how it's going so far.

What I'm looking for are a few people willing to read through what I have and let me know what you like, what works, and what doesn't. I find that sometimes when I write, what I intend to be read and what is actually being communicated on the page are two different things. I need a couple of unbiased eyes to help me. A grammar nazi, to make sure I've got my colons and semicolons correct, would also be appreciated.

A brief bit about the story. It is based on supernatural forces, good and evil, Angels and Demons, etc. While it will not be gruesome, I do expect it to deal with subjects such as rape and death. The overall goal of the story is not to shock or cause horror, but rather be erotic and saddening at the same time.

I think that about covers as much as I'd like to here. If you'd like to help me out and at the same time get a sneak peek at what I'm working on, let me know!