[1793] Impending Doom (prologue)

First of all, hello. I am new to this sub, but I have read the FAQ and New User Thread and already critiqued at a ratio comparable to the word count I am submitting. If I'm violating any rules or leeching, please let me know and I'll fix what I'm doing wrong (not my intention at all).

This is the prologue to a novel I have finished the first draft of. The working title is Impending Doom. I have worked very hard on it (I don't want to sound like I'm just tossing unedited copy in here) and no one has read a word yet. I am looking forward to reading and incorporating your criticism, and thank you in advance for any comments or criticism you may have for me. Here is the link:

Prologue