[review video] How can I improve?

Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QouVIf2Byew

My reviews https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3kjnfa/review_video_really_funny_gameplay_video_honest/cuya5bl

https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3k55mo/review_video_is_my_voice_boring_or_interesting/cuyabl5

Self review

Personally I feel my voice is still too monotone even though I tried to add some personality to it, I reduced my stuttering because I took advice from redditors on here to write a script which I have done (thank you for that people of reddit it helped!) I think my mic is better since I have got a different mic instead of using my iPhone headphones. I have had troubles also getting the correct footage (as my files went corrupted) so I'm worried if my video isn't as entertaining.

things I would like to know

Is my video entertaining? Is my voice boring? Is my voice clear? what can I do next time to improve for my next video?

Thank you and I look forward to your constructive feed back :)