A poem i wrote in class

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This is a first draft and i have never shared any of my poetry with anyone but my close friends. PLEASE tell me what i can improve on and what you think. Thanks    for reading!
 critiques> 1. https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/3slevr/for_they_who_fight/cwyl684
                2. https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/3sjzqg/darling/cwym4tt
Sea to Sea
By NN

I walk a path unknown to me. I walk it to see what i can see.
I want to unravel the mystery of what was around the bend and across the sea 
I search endlessly see what was not in-front of me


For what I will find, I do not know
For why I search, I do not know 
For what I see currently, I do not care


Thus the cycle of walking sea to sea searching for what is not in-front of me continues endlessly.


This is the sentence for the majority of humanity
This is the Punishment for a society that thinks materialistically.
Being apart of this society I have no immunity to being scared of the end of me


Thus i walk sea to sea searching endlessly for what is not in-front of me until I finally reach the end of me.
And when I finally reach the end of me and I have seen all there is to see I will know that I have successfully and depressingly wasted the Gift of me

Posted Nov 13, 2015, 4:40 AM UTC · edited

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