Drowning

I have never been good with poetry but I wrote something and would like feed back. Please no nasty comments. Thanks for reading! Edit: this was originally written as a song so if it flows strangely it is because I have the tune in my head that makes it all fit.

I started out floating
On top of the surface 
And everything was going just fine 

But then the wind got stronger 
And the current got harder 
I slowly slipped beneath the waves

I feel like in screaming 
Like all my airs escaping 
But it must just be a whisper to you

Hello hello
Can anybody hear me
This is my last chance to cry out for help

Hello hello 
I know you can't see me
But don't you notice I'm gone

Hello hello 
Somebody please help me 
I don't think I'll make it this time

I'm slowly slipping farther
The lights getting darker 
And there's one thing I need to say

Goodbye goodbye
I'm sorry I left you 
I thought it would be best

Goodbye goodbye 
We will meet again someday 
But only when the time is right

Just promise me something 
Don't you ever give up 
I wish I could take it all back

https://m.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/4237a2/this_tall_to_ride/

https://m.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/423r1a/the_best_of_me/