[Review Video] (Graphic Violence) Finally took the plunge and made my first gaming video

Hi r/youtubers! Here is my first video

I'm not sure if my intro and outro music is too loud or if my commentary is too low but there is a disconnect between the two especially at the end. I also think I need to work on my tone during the commentary because at times I sound very monotone. I also can hear where my mouth starts to get dry so maybe have water around? Ordering a new mic as the integrated one is horrible but I cleaned it up in audacity so I don't think it sounds too horrible.

Thank you in advance for taking time to review my video!

Fixenix

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Review #1 https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/46anx0/review_video_my_first_time_heavily_editing_a/d04isqh Review #2 https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/45zq59/review_video_did_a_review_on_dillanos_coffee_with/d04j5ms