Hi reddit, I'm still practising making logos, and I need your help again!

http://i.imgur.com/TKIqGVK.jpg I'm really unhappy with my ability to use the Pen tool and choose fonts, so can you give me advice on those things in particular? Additional advice is welcome, but I'm primarily trying to get good at turning sketched designs into professional looking illustrations. I would also like to know how to increase readability, for example, this is supposed to say 'Chennai eSports', but I feel like I've missed the mark.