I'm reminded of The Nimbus 2000 from Harry Potter.

I didn't know what "librate" meant prior to reading this; I take that you're referring to the astronomy term where two bodies vibrate about each other?

With that in mind, I like the poem, the idea that two characters affect each other, that everyone affects everyone else, and the backdrop of astronomy is clever.

That said, I miss the point of the third stanza completely under this reading.

Your syntax is nice and clean; a finished poem could read this cleanly.

There certainly is a wordplay with librate and librate! I could have used liberate at "You librate me" -parts but decided not to. Thanks for your feedback!

So Im guessing you intentionally used librator instead of liberator. The entire time I was picturing like a ww2 bomber. Then I realized the spelling and it changed the whole poem. Both ways were equally beautiful. Ill keep an eye out for your other work!

Fly over our houses  
We stand on the roofs  
Pairs hand in hand  
Rip them apart  



You librate me  
You librate them  
You fly  
*The Librator 2000*  



Take a pair  
Drill in the head  
Mold the mind  
Drop into a life  



You librate us  
You librate all     
You fly  
*The Librator 2000*  

  

No ladders to rooftops  
Are needed anymore  
Because you fly  
*The Librator 2000*  

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