Okay, a few points:

1) You must permalink two different comments of critique you made for someone else's post onto your own or your post will get removed. 

2) Although poetry has no rules I recommend utilizing some sort of format for your piece by breaking it up into lines and or stanzas for effect and accent. 

3) The piece comes off as a "matter of fact" or philosophical statement than anything, which on its own is fine but I think it needs more substance to make the work feel complete rather than coming across as a snippet of a greater work. Maybe explore your ideas in more detail. Make the readers feel why you want this change or contrast. Make them feel your remorse for being caught in this experimental transition.


>To be perfectly honest

>I wanted to be

>To be the monster

You use "to be" and "just" repetitively. Not sure if this is intentional, but if it isn't, maybe using other words to get the message across will smoothen the poem out. Formatting can help as well (read sidebar for help on how to do that).

Aside from that, the poem was short, simple and to the point. I enjoyed it (:

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Beautiful