[1957] To the Depths (Prologue)

I think I've critique enough to submit a piece. Nevertheless, I appreciate all of the grace you've extended me this far.

Looking for feedback on pacing and setting. Also, let me know if you find any convention issues or if something seems unnecessarily confusing. I recognize not everything is flushed out; but, that's what the rest of the book is for. I'm looking for proof-of-concept at the moment.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Fn-6Q18OIWUjpkp1WwbmaDR1D6ajxwU9cfSWG4ciu-Q/edit?usp=sharing