First poem I have ever written.

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In hopes she'll find
love that's increasingly kind
A bandage to wrap her scars.

A feeling so pure
Avoids her for sure
As she is lost among the stars.

With skin like snow
Such a radiant glow
an angel in disguise.

Now that my sun has set
I will never forget
Angels are capable of lies.

Valhalla-Vanguard inspired me earlier with his poem "Escapism". I've never really written poetry before but I have been going through some deep depression and it was nice to find this sub and kind of let loose, as basic and amateur as this poem is.

(1)https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/4jzajr/thought_id_share_one_of_my_poems_for_the_first/d3bcf2e (2)https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/4jv94j/i_wrote_this_while_having_an_anxiety_attack/d3bch2z

EDIT: Typo

Posted May 19, 2016, 7:55 AM UTC · edited

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