I Wanna Travel
I wanna travel
I wanna go somewhere new
The badlands, the Louvre
The isle of Skye under the lights
of the north
I wanna go back to Odense
Return to the north of Italy
Watch the New Year fireworks at Sydney Opera
Or the fireballs in Stonehaven
I wanna travel
I wanna go some place new
Walk the Great Wall of China
Make a quick trip to Istanbul
(Not Constantinople)
Walk on the surface of the moon
Take in the sight of the Mons of Olympus
Visit intelligent life on a far fling planet
For a cup of tea
And find out we share problems
I wanna travel
I wanna go some time new
A rainy day in May in Gothenburg 82
The first ever Glastonbury festival
To and see The Beatles as they
Play on an Apple
I wanna see the future and find out
If I'll ever get my damn jet pack
And take a look and marvel at
Advances in tech
And then, maybe, go home for food
I wanna travel
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Posted Jun 22, 2016, 2:20 AM UTC · edited
I love the line "And find out we share problems", it's an interesting twist. I would describe each of these things more, don't just name them, put the reader in the places you want to travel.
Everyone thinks that if/when we meet aliens they'll be vastly different from us but I'm willing to bet that at the end of the day they go home, crack open a beer and bitch about work just like us