Thank you! Word choice should definitely help with getting at my narrator's true motives/thoughts. Much appreciated!

I enjoyed reading your poem and I definitely feel like I am in the chilly night with there narrator.

That being said, some of the lines do feel a little disjointed and halting. Each line was unpredictable--in a good way--but there was a rhythm that drives the reader through the poem. Occasionally, it seemed a bit "bumpy" and I had to reread the line before moving on. Rather than omitting them altogether, I just recommend being mindful and use these as opportunity to help tell the tale and create a more immersive atmosphere.

I also feeling like there was perhaps a little more story to be told before the end. The beginning seemed very wishful, almost envious from the narrator regarding the stars. It seemed that the narrator felt a kinship with them. At the end, however, I felt like the narrator was spiteful and angry that the stars wouldn't take notice. I suggest using language of similar tone so the reader can better understand the narrator's motive.

All in all though, I really enjoy

*Salutes* Just your friendly neighborhood hipster doing his part.

Thank you very much!! I will be SURE to make changes around this information. 

First, I really like the fact you rhymed through out this. That is a piece of poetry that is dying.  
Anywho, second. Despite the fact that you do end each line with a rhyme, you fail to connect them. Each two lines feel like they were made for only each other. Sure, they might be the same subject, but they lack a connection with the lines around it.  
A good way to- or at least the way I- fix this is by not only having the last two words rhyme, but some words from the previous line rhyme with some in the next line.  
"But you're magic, casting a spell, hell's sporadic
Telepathic, tell me your telling habits"- Sadistik "To be in love"  
This is an example I often bring up to explain how to do this. Sadistik rhymes "magic" with "telepathic" and "hell's sporadic" with "telling habits". Which not only connects them by ending rhyme, but by the beginning rhyme as well. Giving the pair a strong connection. By doing this with lines that are not meant to rhyme, random example lines 8 and 9, yo

Last Night I Wished Upon a Star