first post tell me what you think :)

I think you should read the sidebar.

Hey! Seconded that a good look at the sidebar will make things a lot easier to read, but as you said, first time posting, so I can't blame you! Good message, and obviously passionately written, but I think it needs a good bit of editing. Much your your username, it's "so raw", so just keep an eye out for missing/unnecessary capitalization, fixing grammar and etc. I'd say the main concern for now is setting it up straight. Remember, two spaces after each line to go to the next one!

Haha sorry about that didnt know

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