This poem in interesting. It speaks of trying to appease your wife when she's mad at you from what I can tell. The end is lost on me a bit though. Paint the shade? Painting shadows? or perhaps you mean it literally...like you forgot about something you needed to paint....I'm curious what you mean by your last line.

marriage is hard, kids is about the only thing more complicated I've ran into thus far.

I honestly just really enjoyed it. I don't have anything constructive to say, I just thought it was really solid and I really like it.

Good rhyme scheme, meter is mostly consistent but could use a little work on the off lines.  'A fewer words' reads a bit oddly, but the narrative works well on the whole.  'Today I'll paint the shade.' and 'And still less time to bliss' are excellent lines.  

For all that's good and better, still  
Does something grow more today;  
That upon your holy will  
You have cast your eyes away?

Mistress, shall I sit on knees  
And blow my hair wild?  
Or shall I simply cough and sneeze  
And cry like our child?

No, it won't work again?  
I guess you want a kiss.    
Aa-ha! A fewer words remain,  
And still less time to bliss.

Matters settled, are'nt they?  
What! Kissing won't work?  
I am trying to show the way  
And you think me a jerk.

Shall I buy you silver-gold  
And pluck the moon and stars?  
Or better, get myself sold  
To buy you clothes and cars?

Damn. Okay. The hint I got.  
For promises yesterday made;  
Sweetheart, I just forgot:  
Today I'll paint the shade.



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Oh My Wife!