I think this is my new favorite poem on this subreddit, and I honestly don't even want to pull it apart to see what makes it tick.  It's *that* gorgeous.  

As an ex-Montananite myself (Montanan?  Montanarian? Montanese?), I especially connected with many of the specific locations and descriptions.  One of my favorite local sayings about the state is that Montana is just like a really small town, with *really* long roads.  And I think you've captured that kind of sentiment perfectly in lines like:

>Over so much time, walking among    
>your Cottonwoods, I never learned I was merely one of them  

And:

>How many miles did we daydream between yellow lines?  
>Asphalt cut your forests like paint flung on the wall  

But for me, the real "holy shit moment" was this:

>I remember you like a child remembers his father’s war;  
>He knows better, yet there he is  
>In the yard, winning medals.  

Fuuuuck.  That's fucking brutal, man.  I love this piece.  Can't wait to read more from you.  


The title is a clever reference, first and foremost. I enjoyed the casual language throughout, such as line 4, and I really appreciated the repetition of a hard I sound in line 3. Great work!

I liked this poem quite a bit, it is very descriptive, and has great pacing. Your word put me into Montana. Great work.

This is great. Some of the most vivid imagery I've read here for sure. I've tagged you as "cool Montana poem poster" and will look out for more from you in the future. :)  

I agree with Lana, this poem is simply amazing. I can't really provide any constructive criticism. I love how your personality seems to come out in your poems in a stream of consciousness  type of way. I always have difficulty including dialogue in my poems, but you did an excellent job here. In addition to all this, your ending really packs power and brings the poem home. Your poem has so much packed into it without making the meaning too trite or conspicuous. This is something that is not easy and something I hope to learn how to do. Please keep posting!

Montana on the Rocks