[UR] [RF] 'Intimate Ray' and 'Lord, Take a Liking To Me'

Hey, I'm a 17 year old writer. I'm really eager to get some feedback on my short stories. None of my friends read very much, so it would be great if you would read these two, and give a general review and any advice if you have it! Thanks a lot! These are two pieces of different genres. Each of varying length. I hope you enjoy!

'Intimate Ray':

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BwDbpZD6kQXXbXMyeUlGVXhMek0/view?usp=sharing

'Lord, Take A Liking To Me':

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BwDbpZD6kQXXV3ZHSUFqams0bU0/view?usp=sharing