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Thank you for taking the time to give such a detailed piece of feedback. I sincerely appreciate the critique and will work on your suggestions!

I'm a bit torn  on this between an upvote and a downvote, so, in a rarity for me, I did *not* vote, but I'm also going to offer feedback. 

There are moments of pure poetic genius in this. Glimmerings of creativity and clarity of purpose that are mind-bogglingly effective in their subtly and nuance.  Most of these occur in the first few stanzas of the poem, which leads me to believe this is one of those pieces where the author had the first few lines running around in their head for weeks or months, turning them over and over, refining them mentally, to finally put them down on paper, and then in a rush, composing the rest of the piece without giving it the same level of mental refinement.  

>I woke up this morning smelling of prose and wanting,


The figurative language in this line is among the best I've ever read.  If this line and the next example: 


>Sometimes, hell is a place for mere mortals

Were combined into a single two-line poem, and no other text were written, this would

For my soulmate (suicidal depression)