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For Peter, My Ghost

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Peter old friend

we are only human

we are made of dust

from Adam's soil: ashes

creatures of chance

unable to cope

unable to see

blind to the world

and the bridges put forth before us,

we are damned

to suffer, one way or another

to rest everlasting, to end.

But we are glorious

even when we come undone

and the world will always remember

the songs we wrote

for Alice, for Emma

for women we do not even know

 

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Feedback 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/54xpmh/gum_spotted_sidewalk/

Posted Sep 29, 2016, 5:12 AM UTC

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nihilistictablelamp•

I'm not quite sure if this poem is an allusion to something that doesn't pertain to your personal life. I don't think it does.

 

I love this.

 

"unable to cope

unable to see"

 

This makes me think of a comparison of someone casting blindness as a result of being unable to cope. It's really nice.

 

"and the world will always remember

the songs we wrote"

 

Are my favorite lines, as they remind that even though something has ended, there are still memories that one can retain.

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zombiedanceprod•

This is my favorite type of peom to read. In my mind it just flows from one line to another, very easily read. It makes it sound more like the lines were meant to follow each other. It's also somber yet showes hope despite it. We are doomed to die but can live on through are works. I enjoyed it very much =]

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naught21dec•

I really like the flow in the poem, it engages you to it and it doesn't have a sum meaning or conclusion. I appreciate that. Most people seek meaning in Art but I think that Art is so transcendental that concepts like meaning are incompatible with it. I think what you've done here is Art.

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