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Insomnia

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I lie awake, more sleepless nights,

My mind is full of monstrous frights.

Tossing and turning, I cannot sleep,

Sliding down a slope so steep.

Wondering what plagues my mind,

Insomnia, stress, anxiety, or maybe I'm just going blind?

I'm still awake at 2 a.m.,

In my mind, yelling "Not again!"

Tossing and turning for a few more hours.

The opposite of super powers.

Alas I fall asleep fatigued,

And finally, I am relieved.

This is the first poem I have ever written, I know it's not that good but would like some feedback/constructive criticism.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/55h9a0/a_broken_record/d8apxah

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/55hgb6/nonsense/d8aq6bt

Posted Oct 2, 2016, 1:10 PM UTC · edited

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