The flow of this could be a bit better and there's some mistakes with capitalization (may should be May) and spelling (breath should be breathe) but other than that I love the concept. Nice poem

I like the feeling that I get from it - kind of like "hey, I know that you're feeling kind of out of sync, but relax, you'll feel better eventually".


I really enjoy your poem, considering i've written on the subject of madness myself. The way that your poem seems to move on, describing n almost helpless feeling of being lost in the seasons, hoping your sanity would return.

Now to critique.

I really enjoy your poem but the flow is a bit choppy and would benefit immensely from a  consistent flow on each line. Also, you have minor capitalization and punctuation errors but all in all, i really enjoyed your poem!

I'd really love it if you could review my poem too :) Its all of 4 lines, not long at all

Does it ever hurt to carry such anger;
Cradled on till November
When it's may you're just the same
Till it rains, you're the cloudiest  gray,

Can you speak without the tremor,
Is there a lever for the temper -
What about elation and great joy
Or is your alter mostly decoy,

Bare your woes, come to me,
Breath slowly, cry quietly,
Don't struggle against the grain,
For one day you'll reign again.

[com2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/55wh3h/comment/d8el9hr?st=ITWDPNMR&amp;sh=3e48d6d0) 

[com1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/55xk7g/comment/d8el3i8?st=ITWDLHJQ&amp;sh=0b3b284d) 


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