[Feedback Request] Wrinkled life

I love the tempo of how you began this poem. It's a great line. The tempo began to wander afterwards, though, in the middle. Which is quite often how art seems to go. I implore you to continue on your path of self-redemption, and even self-forgiveness. This poem illustrates your journey quite beautifully, from birth to tragedy at a young age and further into your past mistakes growing up into a man, and finally a rebirth in a way through your own self-realization. Well done.

My one critique is that much of the poem is very lucid, and autobiographical, until the very end where it becomes kind of dreamlike, albeit much as love is. The shift was very sudden, or rigid. A better transition is needed, even just breaking up the thoughts into seperate stanzas would help in this.

Either way, good job. Keep praying. Keep wishing on shooting stars. Love your Father, and most importantly, keep moving forward. Cheers!

Hello fellow poet!

Hail and well met! It looks like you're having difficulty with the Reddit gremlins eating your lovely line spacing and enjambments. Here's a crash-course on how to defeat the Gremlins of Redditus.

• Two spaces at the end of any line followed by the enter key will force a line-break
• typing the six characters &, n, b, s, p, and ; together with no spaces will force an inline space.
• combining these two techniques together (typing &, n, b, s, p, ; and then two spacebara and the enter key) will create an "empty" line, which looks like a stanza break.

if you have any questions, feel free to ask me or another member of the mod team.

-your friendly neighborhood moderator, u/actualnameislana