I think a bit more imagery/description/senses could be helpful - what does that look like inside your brain?  how does the rope at the end feel? It's hard to keep up the rhyme and also make the reader feel what you want, but I think you can make a few changes to make it more impactful.

Love this! 

Something about the last stanza feels a little off rhythmically, I would suggest something like: 

Guess all I can do is hope, 
Hope that my good can hold the rope
And keep me from this slippery slope 
No idea how far it goes 

But not sure if that changes the meaning too much. Cheers! 

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