No no I'd rather you didn't think that, my full intention of the story was to show two people having sex via a robot proxy, hence the constant allusions to wearing masks and 'perfect' robots that take their image, they're watching the perfect versions of themselves  because they're unsatisfied with their own image. The part you highlighted was a speech from the robot denouncing and smearing humanity as imperfect and beneath these robots and trying to choke the guy. 

Huh.  Yeah I didn't get a "sex" vibe from this at all.  You may want to reconsider large portions of the poem, if that is the aim.  Huge swaths of it seem oddly... violent, for a poem supposedly about "sex".  Like this part, for example: 

>BLOOD STAINS AND DRIES. MAN WANES THEN DIES. MAN'S PAIN IS STRIFE. OUR VEIN'S SHINE WHITE.  
>Vain eyes pierce mine.  
>Dissatisfied.  
>He grabs at my throat.  
>I can not resist.  
>Paralysed in chokes  
>I fall into fits.  
>He laughs as I kick.  
>Fell prey to the act.  

If this section is about "sex", I'll eat my hat.  And if you insist this for some reason was supposed to describe a sexual act, I am forced to surmise that you have written...what I can only describe as "rape porn" in poetic form.  If this is correct, I'm not only unimpressed with the piece, I am disturbed and disgusted by it instead.  

Ok I see where you're coming from to an extent but I'd like to try my hand at explaining at least where I was coming from.

I am a native English speaker (lol), I did not intent to piece be a video game exposé it was meant to be a story set in the future showing my idea of what sex could possibly be like and a musing on the singularity of AI. 

I may have relied a little too much on inference but I didn't really want to spend time explaining the context. From what you're saying I seem to have missed the mark there, I understood that the opening would only get its meaning in retrospect.

I can definitely see where you're coming from on sentence structure, and 'skipping' as if were. Although most of it was intentional I now see  it was a personal misstep and didn't work out how I thought it would, thank you for your feedback.

I honestly have no idea how to critique this.  So much of it is just gibberish.  You've got a boatload of spelling errors, oddly random capitalization,  weird grammatical knots, loose ends, false starts, run-on sentences, sentence stubs, and just straight-up sentence structure weirdness going on. And there's honestly so much of this goofiness that I'm beginning to wonder if there may be a language barrier involved here.  So that all needs to be cleaned up first, obviously.  If you, Author, are indeed an English-as-a-second-language speaker, please feel free to ask for help in fixing these errors.  I know first hand how difficult it can be to write meaningfully in a foreign language.  

As to the content of the piece, I can only guess that this is all "meaningful" (and by that I mean relates diegetically) to some video game.  Unfortunately for your readers who have never played that game, or those who just didn't understand the references, the impact of lines like 

>My wife will play l

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