this is like seeing a bit of broken glass on the sidewalk.

Thanks mate. I like your reading though it wasn't what I had in mind.

I struggled with this piece, but to the extent I had any idea what I was doing, I wanted to concretize an experience of being in Venice Beach (the titular vnc).

Interesting. I applaud experimental poems like this. I hate to leave you with "I don't get it", so I will say that it looks aesthetically pleasing on with the spacing like that. It feels technical at first, but then the "isaid" comes in and brings a bit of organic/human feel to it. It looks like code and the idea of code poetry really excites me, so good job.

Love the way it looks and the mystery behind it. Leaves you guessing

I am familiar with code poetry a little bit, though frankly I don't think there's much hope for it. This was not intended as code.

Look like one of those perl obfuscated code contest that we use to play long time ago. As usual I tried to see if any of known language could lead into a successful compilation and execution of the code , but the mismatch between the opening and closing bracket makes it unlikely to be so: ([ )]   

As we are not going to get the key, and will be left to our own explanation of the code, I'll just say good work... give a lot of food for toughs and some great idea and challenges on trying to mix code of poetry in the same place.   

Did you heard about this?
http://sourcecodepoetry.com


I really like how the closing ) comes before the closing ].  In code, it isn't supposed to be like that, which gives it a disjointed feeling.

vnc([!