This poem's lack of any punctuation in the beginning is problematic for me, since commas exist elsewhere. Rhyming didn't sit super well either. This gave the work a rough read for me at first. I also had trouble finding a tone within this, and it may be in part due to punctuation, but the *Dopamine, is dope I mean* and a few other lines distracted me from finding the emotion in this. Keep on working - *These are wasted lines vacate your fake fate parking* caught my attention. Keep at it.

This was very difficult to read because of the lack of punctuation throughout the entire piece, or just misplaced punctuation that leads to awkward pauses when reading it out loud. 

I'd suggest putting your stuff through different phases of editing to make sure when you're ready to share you aren't missing words like here: 

    My erratic rationale that allows the worst happens

The worst happenings? The worst *to* happen? 

In addition to the problems with punctuation and lineation, there are a few other issues with this piece, chief among them being the lack of concrete detail. It's very hard to create a mental picture of what is happening in this poem. Instead, we are bombarded by wordplay and ungrammatical sentences that don't make much sense. My advice is to keep working. Try to paint a scene in your mind's eye and keep things simple.

Elevation (Would love feedback as it is my first submission)