Wow, I really enjoyed this because I tend to visualise when reading, it paints a better picture and helps me put myself in the position of the author or POV of the character. This hit me deep... I could feel your pain as I read this. I think the ambiguity of the writing (lack of names, places, really anything that is super specific to you and your life) also makes it more of something people can relate to and makes it easy for readers to *feel* the emotions that are pouring out of your words, as typically (at least for me) when reading a story about great pain or tragedy, we tend to want to empathize and relate this pain to situations we ourselves have ever dealt with or experienced. There's an odd solace in meeting people who share in your suffering, makes you feel less alone. Tragically beautiful, OP.

I love the structure of this. It's not neat and calculated, yet is still so cohesive. It really supports the raw emotion and brashness of some of your thoughts. That along with the authenticity of what you're actually saying makes it a mournfully beautiful piece. I felt included in your pain as I read through this and as others have shared, was feeling along with you. 
Thank you for sharing yourself here. 

I wish for anybody reading the post to ignore the punctuation and decides on his own where should any verse end/

Hey thanks. I wrote it in a spoken word kinda way. So I originally wrote it as one big paragraph and thought I'd try to format it a little better. I wasn't sure how though. 

If Eminem ever reads this, you'll get signed  
There are a lot of emotions displayed, and the more i read the stronger that voice i use to read gets, like i'm getting more angry and more expressive. And that's why the first thing i thought of reading this was eminem because he puts a lot of emotions there as well.


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