Almost Everything

The way this poem is written is stylistically and structurally good but I have a few comments that may help you:

1. Your poem takes an idea that has been extremely prevalent (dreaming about someone you love) and makes it more personal and desperate. I really enjoyed that part of it, but at the same time, you haven't done anything beyond that, where it honestly feels like an extended cliche.
2. I think the cause of that extended cliche type thing is rooted in your word choice, where you use words like exhilarating, excitement, immediate, and everything which make the poem vague and it sounds like the narrator is unable to describe what is going on.
3. This leads to a remarkably prosaic poem, with almost no metaphor and imagery, you even tell the reader "this is not a metaphor." I'm not a fan of that personally, but that's subjective.

I like this piece because it's both relatable and simple, it's easy to get through and it paints a decent picture in your head about what you, the author, are feeling.

I agree with the commenter above me, the whole "this isn't a metaphor" bit is kind of too direct? I think you've got to beat around the bush a little, paint a more vivid picture, throw in some lucid vocabulary and, be metaphorical.

I like the straightforwardness but would like to see you add some detail and lovely visuals, keep writing please!

I'm new here. I'm a songwriter, not a poet. With that said, I really like your piece. It's good for me, as a newcomer to poetry generally, to read something so simple and concise. The second verse is where the beauty lies for me as I find it to be the most relatable section.

In terms of critique, as you already know I'm as amateur as amateur gets when it comes to poetry, but I'm inclined to agree with the above comment in terms of painting a more vivid picture.

Pretty great poem!

Two suggestions:

1. Break up the lines a little bit. They read a lot like nicely chopped and unified sentences, which is good for writing prose, but doesn't leave the reader with much to take away from it (in terms of the visual layout of the poem, not the actual content, which is great!)
2. You use "This" a lot. And while phonetically it works in the sentences, when you use abstract language (there's not necessarily anything alluded to with it), you might be losing out on a potentially powerful statement or idea. Try changing all of the intangible words ("this", "it is") that don't refer to anything concrete to a tangible thing.

But great work! :)