I like poems that are complex and take a lot of time to analyze, but sometimes I like poems like this that are easy to read and simple. I love how the poem starts out by strongly disagreeing with the drug use, but halfway through the main character starts doubting their self and justifying the use, and then starts using it. There are a few cliches like, it's never enough and climbing higher that gives it a generic feel. Sometimes I like to complain a lot, but now is not one of those times.

I found this really intriguing. I liked how simple it was, but the content itself was deep. 

So... not bad, for a draft.  I'd recommend working on making the punctuation consistent, the metaphors flow together more, and fleshing out the narrator as well as the 'she', but the piece has potential.

There's stars in her eyes again  
I'm afraid they aren't from happiness  
She doesn't have a care in the world  
Her veins are a mixture of blood and poison  
So much in fact,  
It's probably not even in that order    
Poison and blood  
Sometimes I wonder how she manages to stay alive  
No food, no sleep    
She's so skinny  
But that's okay  
She's always been thin,  
I suppose    
It's never enough,  
She always climbs higher    
Too high  
What about the fall?  
Sometimes I wonder if this should make me sad  
But  
It's silly to wonder about such things    
I took the pipe from her,  
It took over me in seconds!    
Sometimes I wonder  
But now is not one of those times

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