Thank you, yeah I need to work on my flow

i really enjoyed the direction this poem went. its structure and the metaphors amd symbols it provided were very strong. images are vivid and direct. the pacing and rhythm, however, seemed a little choppy to me. i coukdnt quite pin down a flow and felt myself getting caught up reading several lines. overall i enjoyed the poem, im a strong fan of celestial imagery

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The Moon