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Criticism: I like it but I think the poem would be stronger if it didn't mention sex overtly but instead left it at "innocent cannibalism."  Saying "sex" overtly kills the mystique of the poem.  Also, I'd use a different adjective to describe the cannibalism than "innocent."  Sex, viewed in this deeply carnal way, is in no way innocent.  Try "consensual cannibalism" which is a little more sinister.

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Anthropophagy