[Review Video] Is my new Intro and Content good enough?

Hey guys! Thnx for the review. I'm trying to get into the dreadlock community of youtube, but I'm having a little difficulty... how is my content? Heres the video: https://youtu.be/1jJoNespLHw

Self Review: I think its pretty good, I didn't do my best with editing and I have a tendency to ramble. But over all, I think its fine enough to get a following.

Review 1: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6u5g40/review_video_exploring_reef_low_tide_creatures/dlqa4l2/

Review 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6u6avc/review_videoswearing_the_intro_to_my_channel/dlq9o7r/