Christmas Flowers [feedback wanted]

Christmas night in august    
Came upon  
This old town, sun  
Falling; white christmas flowers.  
Children playing chasing, raving couples  
Fight; cry like  
Ancient rivers whisper  
into a summer night;  
holy night;  
starfilled southern skies.  
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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/6z8dxs/every_night_2am/dmta2cl/ 

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