ice cream night

ice cream night
cream nice cream
night nice cream
not nice cream
not ice cream

feedback 1: https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/74nmtb/whither_does_the_blossomed_flower_go/ feedback 2: https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/74offl/its_a_long_way_to_the_gym/ Looking for ways to expand this poem and change it, all ideas welcome!