Sleepless Delights

I lay puzzled

In blurred recollections

Of faceless names.

I drown in hollow echoes

That buzz and flicker tirelessly

Behind haunted eyes.

I toss and turn;

I pant and pace,

Trying to escape the head in which I lay.

I know the rhythm is pretty disjointed and off, I seem to be pretty shit at structure. I think the adverb 'tirelessly' disrupts the flow quite a bit... Also, I initially had 'behind puffed eyelids' instead of 'behind haunted eyes'... let me know which one you prefer. I thought 'haunted eyes' had a stronger effect, since this poem is about more than just sleeplessness. I guess the last sentence is also a bit clunky... Anyway, any criticism is welcome.

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