Hey! Thanks for sharing your feedback! I appreciate it!

This is the best thing I ever read in this sub-reddit,

No joke, I am being completely sincere.

The flow is impeccable and the color, vivid and intense.

This line is especially prominent in my mind:

>red, blue, green sparks of firework!

As I am reminded of a similar scene in "Madagascar 3; Alex escapes from the Russian circus".

The last line is fascinating for its decadence:

>i am cartwheels on the water.

I feel you and your close associates have a bright future.

Thanks for the poem. Write another!

Thank you! Yeah I was hoping for an explosion of colors, so I'm glad that came across :) and feel free to adapt the text to music if you're inspired to, it would be interesting to hear what you come up with! Thanks for sharing your reaction! I appreciate it!

I'm not really sure how to articulate this, as I write a lot of fiction but I'm completely new to poetry. I really love the imagery of this poem. My mind was filling with a lot of colors with each line that I read. After reading it a few times, I was starting to think of music to go with this, as I could totally see this being lyrics to a song.

I hope any of that made sense. Thank you for writing it! You're pretty talented.

Ahh thank you thank you! I'm glad the initial description came across well -- that's a part I definitely wanted to get feedback on so I'm glad it's working for you :) Thanks for the kudos!

your initial summary of the mystic, the scientist and the artist is marvelously perfect - especially "an artist told me i am backflips off a high dive firing a machine gun with each hand". That's what I feel like, that's what I want to be! :) Superb work, as per usual. 

Thank you! The way you described the flow speeding up into "one breathless rush" and then slowing back down towards the end is exactly what I was going for so it's great to hear that it's working. Thanks for the read, thoughts, and kudos! Much appreciated!

I really enjoyed this. The lineation in the middle here: 


>cannon ball blast off, swan dive,    
>pool noodle pink flamingo belly flop—     
>fire ant at a backyard picnic     
>holding fifty times its weight, oh yes    
  
Is really well done. One thing I think is really interesting that you've done here is how you use lineation to control the pace of your reader. In the section I highlighted, I read those lines in one breathless rush. But later on, your lineation slowed my reading pace and allowed me to really consider each word. 

Nice work. This is a really solid piece.  

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a mystic told me i am god.  

a scientist told me i am stardust.  

an artist told me i am backflips  

off a high dive firing a machine gun  

with each hand— and when the water catches me?  

red, blue, green sparks of firework!  

cannon ball blast off, swan dive,  

pool noodle pink flamingo belly flop—  

fire ant at a backyard picnic  

holding fifty times its weight, oh yes  

just watch the fifty black trash bags  

stuffed with coke cans balance on my head  

all while i juggle fifty knives on fire  

and light the sparkler bit between my lips  

yes i am backflips— i am stardust.  

i am cartwheels on the water.  

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[1](https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7a2w1r/t%C3%AEwaz/dp73zc9/) &amp; [2](https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7a3alh/marginal_flaws/dp752gw/)

Fire Ant