You Fill My Mouth with More Words Than I Can Speak

Hey there!

I like this a lot. I actually like the foliage bit— the hand falling like a leaf from your chest, though I do agree with u/ParadiseEngineer that "foliage" is the one-not-like-the-others as far as the imagery as a whole is concerned. Though I do like the image on its own. I love:

The night wears us
and the streetlights the same.

great use of grammar, diction and image to create a… I don't know how to put it: a dreamy/romantic vibe? I also like later how you use the italics instead of quotes. Good choice there.

One thing that works, though it strikes me as a bit off is:

men big enough not to be killed

I generally find using negatives like this to weaken the flow a bit. I think it might be that it's hard to imagine something not happening, and then this is coupled with a very passive "not to be killed". So, while it does work, and adds to the poem as is, it felt a little clunky— but that may just be a matter of personal taste. Thought I would point it out.

Finally, the ending is quite punchy as u/ParadiseEngineer pointed out, and I love it. Overall you craft a very beautiful scene that is both specific and relatable. Thanks for sharing. Hope something I said here helps!

You've got some punch there in your last line, there's only one thing that I can think of that you should be looking at changing: 'foliage'. That's the one word that stands as a piece of imagery out of place, you've got a room, street lights, the orange glow, the circuitry of the lights and then green foliage? perhaps 'texture' is something that you could consider putting in that place? That then leads onto giving the reader the idea of the texture, the touch, the feel of a chest.

Overall, top marks! Late night encounters is one of my favourite subjects for a piece, keep up the good work :)

"You luminesce orange regret," caught my eye of a bright imagery of sad regrets after more than a casual night of "sharing." Nice form, and sadly passionate.