College

I really like the subject matter. The formatting confuses me, though.

You could perhaps switch the beginning around so it starts 'Shot after shot/ In the midst of drinks' - makes more sense and gives the poem symmetry.

'Here' should be 'hear'. But that's just nitpicky.

Overall, I like the poem, but I would redo the formatting.

I loved this. As someone who struggles with mental illness, that kind of casual talk of suicide sometimes really gets to me, and when I was in college it was so common. I like how you made it clear that true feelings were being masked. Really relatable subject matter. Well done!

I enjoyed the piece, but the slashes serve only to cloud the poem.

Very insightful and relatable, this can be taken literally or metaphorically, good job

I like the topic you have chosen. The use of dialogue in the poem is a great tactic for highlighting the incongruities between what they say aloud and what they are really feeling.

I think it would be cool to both open and close the poem with "shot after shot". You could take out some background descriptors (ex. "hiding our true feelings", "in the midst of drinks", etc. This is useful in a stage script, but makes the writing of poetry too transparent for a literary audience as it is already obvious that drinking and hiding their true feelings is what they are doing. Let the dialogue/text itself provide the peek into the message without laying it out so plainly. I promise you this is something I have been getting feedback on for my own writings and I can see what a difference it has made when I go back and tweak the poems.