"love runs from marching  
words and it runs from a marching beat"

I'm not sure exactly what this means. Love runs from marching? but you didn't really explain what marching means.

Other than that, it's an amazing piece. Keep up the good work!

Great piece, really appreciate all the call backs to music and rhythm throughout. I feel like you could end it a little stronger, "reserved for a good one" falls flat for me. But otherwise, awesome work. 

I really like this. The music metaphor works really well. The example chorus is also really good and  actually catchy.  My only issue is that in that part love marches but at the end you have a bunch of lines about how love runs from marching and has nothing to do with marching. And there was no clear reason for the shift it reads more like you forgot you said love marches at the beginning. 

    A good one is like  
    a pop song that sticks  

    it hits the right notes  
    early on and get to the chorus quick  

    like "love marches toward victory  
    and sings to God above,  

    yet if I had the answers,  
    you know I wouldn't need your love"  

    The verse is something distant  
    or mumbled in between  

    some hum-drummed slurs so  
    slung beneath the sturdy tentpole's beam  

    and right before we find ourselves  
    at the foot of some great wall  

    like Jesus, lust or Mexico,  
    we can jump it and we can fall  

    "love runs from marching  
    words and it runs from a marching beat  

    it runs from marching orders  
    and it runs from tapping feet"  

    for Love is not a victory march  
    beneath the summer sun;  

    love is broken, battered, bruised-  
    reserved for a good one.  

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7mqit1/something_you_trip_over_in_the_woods/dsr63ye/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7q8oam/song_of_solemn_ones/dsr5u7w/

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