[2521] The Idle Hours - Chapter One.

Hey everyone, after a year of writing prompts and short stories, I recently decided to try my hand at a novel. I have had an idea for a mystery/SciFi concept for awhile, and the writing process a bit of a struggle, so I am grateful for any advice you guys can offer.

The Idle Hours - Chapter One: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1V9YKOO7i1SmEUk2mKNmisstu_P_IaUuCwRQ1IoP1dXs/edit?usp=sharing

Here are my critiques:

[2100] The Revolving World, Chapter 1: Broken Headstone

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/7tpjjx/2100_the_revolving_world_chapter_1_broken/dteqs3i/

[1854] Thief, Soldier, Slave

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/7ulpbp/thief_soldier_slave_1854/dtq9609/