Thank you for allowing myself and the Reddit community the chance to view one of your pieces. Just enjoy what you write.

I'm fairly happy with it. I can see how the more you write, the more the words will flow. Thank you! 

I like it. The only advice I’d give is to keep writing, your style will develop along the way. 

Also, are you happy with this piece of poetry? Because that’s all that matters.

Yeah. I'm pretty sure it doesn't follow the rules. I did base it off the structure of a sonnet, just didn't have the time and or will to follow all the rules :) Thanks for the feedback! 

You have solid imagery and I notice how you choose a more shakespearean style not 100 percent sure if it follows iambic pentameter completely but that doesn't entirely matter to me the point of poetry is to break the rules every once in a while, so just don't be afraid to do that while finding your writing style.

Thank you. Wrote it for my girlfriend, she liked it :)

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Newbie. First Poem ever wrote, any advice?