I was very pleasantly surprised by your ending! Your climax!! The rhyming is just right. I feel you recollecting past events. But I wonder how the memories relate from one to the other. What is the link between them. How and why the particular memory is recalled in that order.

First of all I would like to say I adore this, secondly I'm commenting on mobile (sorry). The idea for the motif is great, what I would suggest is less direct descriptives. You get halfway to creating a scene in each stanza but then spoil it with a direct statement each time. For example, instead of saying the two brothers look up to the subject, describe how they actually do that. This style will develop both the brothers and the subject by giving details on their relationship, which will ultimately build more meaning into the relationship that is lost by the author.

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Beautiful. I love the way you convey a wistful longing emotion all the way through to come to a climax of it at the end. The way you also set up your rhythm, In beats of two making four, building four of those per each stanza, absolutely brilliant. Excellent job well done. Thank you for sharing this gem.

I really liked this. It conveys a complex feeling well.

I remember you in counts of two
Two emerald eyes I fondly knew.
Dancing with light and inspired wit,
Such deep emotions they would emit.

I remember you in counts of two
Two younger brothers that looked like you.
Their admiration we all could see,
You were who they aspired to be.

I remember you in counts of two
Two parents that proved to be untrue.
Shattered pieces of a broken home,
I tried to help you feel less alone.

I remember you in counts of two 
Two talented hands you made music through.
The tap of sticks or plucking of strings
Were some of the most beautiful things.

I remember you in counts of two
Watching now from a far away view.
I try my best not to become blue,
For the two used to be me and you. 


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Remembering You in Twos