You might want to format it a little better. Good formatting can go a long way in giving your writing some tone.

As for the content itself, I can see where you're coming from with it. When asking question in writings, I do like to see some payoff in some form of a statement. Even if it doesn't clearly answer the question, it can be a moment which gives some clarity, or does something completely different, if you want.

All in all, I think it's got potential.

Okay so I give feed back quote what I said to that person? Then post my poem... 

Hey,

I'm taking your poem down because you haven't included two links to recent feedback, or because some of the feedback you've included isn't high-effort. If you're confused as to what that means, check the [rules](https://www.reddit.com/r/ocpoetry/wiki/rules) and the [feedback guide](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/wiki/feedbackcritiques). Message me when you change the feedback and I'll put your poem back up. And of course, you can always post in the [Sharethreads](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/search?q=Sharethread&sort=new&restrict_sr=on&t=week) without posting feedback. 

Cheers,  
Dog the Mod

? Like other reddit things I've done? I'm kinda challenged with that kinda stuff and don't know how.

Thank you. Could you point out what exactly??? Wording?