You give really in depth descriptions, but you should try reading your poem aloud so you can see if it flows well. It might work better to have the lines equal in length / amount of syllables so it flows smoother.

The second half flows better than the first, so you mostly need to edit the latter portion.

With some editing it will be really good though. 

I got a very clear picture of a port after just a few lines and the image of a single natural thing amongst this centre of industry is compelling, I think bringing it back toward the end could drive the point home.

A bird roams the skies, looking for perch.

The air is filled with grunts, 

of machines lifting metal boxes,

Cranes rule the skies here, and the pulse of earth has 

long since died.

Feel concrete beneath your feet, as you gaze upon blue 

sky.

Breeze comes;

Carrying chill from beyond break waters

and greetings from faraway,

The berth rumbles, myrtle green bubbling,

as tug-boats ready a welcome for titanic guests;

Behemoths carrying the Atlantic dream and cargo from 

over the seas.

Make sure you wear a reflector, it's protocol.


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Tema Port.