I like the subtle change of theme in each stanza. I feel more punctuation could help, especially around colons so that we can understand where the lists begin and end. Enjoyable read, very visual, well done

I don't have any real criticism, this is beautiful. What I do have to say is this: Try experimenting with punctuation. Each stanza has a beautiful rhythm to it, and I think it would be satisfying to have some punctuation to reinforce the meter. That being said- and this contradicts my last comment (I think it's perfectly okay to like two things two different ways equally as much! Lol.)- I love the lack of punctuation in this poem. The absence of periods, commas, and other punctuation makes the punctuation you do use so much more impactful. This is a really beautiful poem, thanks for sharing it (:

i’ve witnessed your bad days

your happy days

but in every one

i am witnessing magic:

a determination to blossom

in a tundra

my dear mother, 

you have bloomed
  
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you are strong

you have pushed limits;

moved mountains 

you are wonderful

despite your demons

whispering the contrary

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each and every

tear you squeeze out

is laced with bravery

and heartache

every struggle 

is faced with 

unimaginable stamina

you are tough; inspirational




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(gave feedback at https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8apjvm/walk_the_line/ https://oc.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8akjje/dancing_sea/ )



i love you, mom