[2707] A Lapse in Fate

So here's [My story] (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fo0BHIb9e9Z7BULxe9rvpOhBjwt27SqfjobJeUJxa6w/edit?usp=sharing)

I would love to know if the story seems believable enough and if the characterisation is well done or utter shit and the ending is a bit of a mixed bag in my eyes as I like how it ends but I feel it may be confusing for others, so if you are confused or don't like it please let me know and explain exactly what confuses you or what it is about it that you dislike. THANKS! [Crit 1] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/89oqao/900_pictures_iii_tgif/) [Crit 2] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/88tanz/the_night_shift_2132/)