[2391] Wanderer's Legacy

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I've started five or six stories over the years, but this is the first one I've really buckled down on. I'm five chapters deep, but doubt is starting to creep in again. Is my prose on point? Do I spend too much time on exposition? Not enough? Do I indulge in too much world building or not enough? Do my characters feel distinct or too samey? How's their dialogue? And finally, is it interesting in the least?

This is just the prologue, so events transpire a little more briskly than they unfold in the main chapters. But they set up the motivations for a few characters and it informs their behavior going forward. Or, at least, that's the goal.

For context: It's set 17 years before the events of the story in earnest. An invasion scenario--later to be referred to simply as The Arrival--takes Earth by storm, and the beings behind it set up shop for reasons no one quite understands.

This is a Sci-Fi, post-invasion story, but largely rooted around the characters and their fated (or ill-fated) meetings. Inspirations are stories like The Road, The Last of Us, and a fair bit of GRRM's magic.

You know the drill, tear me to shreds.

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