Even I have the same problem. Try writing the same poetry again with less rhymes and see how it feels

Thank u for ur kind words! Yeah I seem to get too carried away with rhyming sometimes. Gotta learn and move forward!

Great start to the poem! The first three lines got me right onto the topic with a 'wow' factor.

Reading on, your rhyming scheme just irks me a bit. But, the end seems flawless and I loved the rhyming scheme there.

The end made me read again. This time, I felt that you made good use of the rhymes. But, still I have a feel that, maybe, the rhyming scheme just stops the flow a bit.



**Lost in Belief**  
  
  
  
How can one whose beliefs be strong,  
Chose to revere one for whose existence is but a mystery,  
Yet to some, a colossal misery?  
  
  
How can one whose opinions be strong,  
Chose to shadow one for Its greatness,  
A soul never wrong,  
For all we know, we could be outrageous!  
  
  
A dagger’s ready to pierce,  
Whose bearers are so fierce,  
Yet, they’d know too well,  
They’d know that they’d depart to hell.  
  
  
For what is belief?  
Is it for those filled with curiosity,  
Or is it for the thief?  
  
  
For all we care,  
Is for the love we share,  
  
  
It is foul to think,  
That His existence is not pure,  
For it is for the best,  
To not be too sure.  
  
  
His existence may just be but a figment of our imagination,  
Whilst the principles will guide us, till death do us part.  
  
  
  
[Feedback #1] (https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8nxoom/late_night_lonely_hearts/), [Feedback #2] (https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8o0sh8/in_black_and_white/)
