[2259] The Things We Hurt

Title is temporary.

Looking for criticism on the general flow of the story, writing style, and anything else that comes up. :)

My story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sryCspOUi11CI65jQMzz64-BQ-lOMZt1NEd-4eJPCp4/edit?usp=sharing

My critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8tsbch/2562_a_fine_meal/e1kf7ys