[2813] The Inheritance

Hello again.

Late Edit: If someone is doing a late review, i would love if you could comment on my introduction/opening paragraphs. No one has really commented much on them which tells me they are probably OK but not great. How to improve them?

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I am trying to work on two things. My dialogue and making each character unique, and it is quite possible they are both terrible, which is why I am posting here. The latter half of this submission is a Council meeting, where the reader goes in not knowing anyone. Go big or go home, right?

Afterwards: So 2800 words is a veerrry short piece to introduce so many characters. How confusing was it, what was your take on each of the characters, and what needs to be addressed for it to work?

Critique: [3823: My Ally] (https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8u1ztq/3823my_ally/e1gjvdc/)